I will be showing my story. Here is my story.
Draco was in his house and he started to get hungry for Doritos. But he is not allowed to get up because it was 3:00.
Draco got up still and went to the kitchen and started to look for it and then
a mysterious voice said, “ There are no more chips.”
Draco was sad.
Draco was sad but still he can find more chips in the kitchen he looked around he didn’t find any chips. Draco was starving.
But he got an idea he went to the most famous chip store called Chipland. He found the Dorito isle and got lots of Doritos. Draco was happy because he got his chips
I hoped you enjoyed. #stay safe. Bye!
Thank you for sharing your work Rye.
ReplyDeleteIt's always good to read new blogs.
This story almost sounds like you have written it about my daughter Sam.She loves Dorito chips.
I like that you have used the word 'mysterious'.I wonder who belonged to the voice.
Have a great weekend.
Kamusta Rye - cool writing, do you like Dorito chips too? Luckily the shop was open so late so he could buy some more chips ...
ReplyDeleteWhat have you been eating while on lockdown? Or what food do you miss eating since we are on lockdown?
Keep up the good work :)
Kia ora Rye!
ReplyDeleteWell done for expanding on your plan from yesterday. Your punctuation is looking incredible. You have punctuated your dialogue excellently.
Next steps: You can extend your ideas by 'showing' instead of 'telling'. For example in the phrase 'started to look for it' You could explain what Draco was doing. eg. He opened the cupboards, looked in the drawers, hunted in the pantry, looked behind the couch for any old dropped ones?
Look forward to seeing you develop your writing further on Monday!
Miss D
Good morning Rye.
ReplyDeleteI would love to know what Draco looks like.When I read the name,I get a visual of someone wearing a cloak with a pointed collar.He's not very tall and wears black shoes.His hair is long and he's wearing a black suit.
I would love to know how you'd describe him.
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Hello Rye, I am enjoying reading your blog posts. Did you write about Doritos because you like them? I am going to give you 2 words to look up...isle and aisle ... let me know what you find. English is a strange language!
ReplyDeleteHello Rye,This is just a comment to let you know that I have had a look at your blog today.
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Hello Rye.Just wishing you a happy week.I can't wait to see what other work you have been working on.
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Hello Rye.I was just checking your blog today.Have a great week and I am looking forward to your next lot of work.
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Hello Rye.I was just checking your blog to see your work.
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Hello Rye.I am just checking your blog to see your work.Have a great week and I hope to see some more work soon.
ReplyDeleteHello Rye.
ReplyDeleteI was just checking to see if you had added any new learning.I can't wait to see what other work you have been working on over these long holidays.
Have a great week.
Hello Rye.
ReplyDeleteI am just leaving a comment to let you know that I have had a look at your blog today.