See baby, gorilla, bush, leaves, tree, rocks
Smell disgusting stinky
Hear bees stomp noise
Feel soft wind
Taste
Alex was staring at the soft, baby gorilla. The smell was so disgusting. There so much pointy grass and huge giant trees waving. There were leaves falling down. Bees were buzzing around. The stomping from the big gorilla echoed through the trees. The bush was swinging around and the wind was blowing the leaves and the bushes. The noise level up in the sky was loud.
Hello Rye, I like the way you added some good detail into your post. I thought this was the best sentence"The bush was swinging around and the wind was blowing the leaves and the bushes." Maybe you could add some more descriptive words like the wind was howling, or the leaves were gliding. how much time did you get to complete this? Did you do more descriptive writing?
ReplyDeleteHello Rye.I love the picture you have used.I love reading about animals and finding out new things about them.I like the descriptive words you have included with your work.Your writing gives you a sense of being there.Why did you choose to use a photo of a gorilla and baby?I look forward to hearing from you.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Rye, it is Michaela, here and I like the way you have done the blog post. I really like the way that you were describing we you were. Maybe next time you can fix and reread the very first sentences but Rye, it is a good infix.
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